100WC by Ana

I’ll tell you something, never go in the woods at night. By now I’ve been in the wood twice, both at night. I will never go again but I’ll take you there now. That night I was alone and decided to go for a walk in the wood. It was almost like a power cut but I didn’t stop one bit. Something did make me stop though, a skeleton hanging of a branch. Never go in the woods at night. All was dark and gloomy but I still took a few slow, steady steps through the inky, blackness of the wood… And then I saw a light…

4 Responses to “100WC by Ana”

  1. Rebecca (Team 100WC)September 18, 2013 at 2:06 pm #

    Hi Ana,
    This is a really interesting idea that leaves the reader hanging by a thread, wondering what will happen next. You might like to think about how you are developing your idea, by which I mean there is a little bit of repetition.
    You also have one little spelling mistake, see if you can spot it.
    Good writing though.
    Rebecca

  2. Mr BoneSeptember 18, 2013 at 8:11 pm #

    Well done Ana, this is a super piece of writing that makes the reader want to find out more. You have used the prompt in a very interesting way by making it into a cliffhanger. Re-read the work carefully to yourself and see if you can make any improvements. I am really looking forward to reading your next 100WC! Mr Bone

  3. eleanorSeptember 19, 2013 at 11:00 am #

    that is a brilliliant story even if it has only 5 lines

  4. Mrs Stones (Team 100WC)September 21, 2013 at 6:03 pm #

    Hi Ana,

    I love how you have written in the style of talking to the reader, it grabs their attention and makes them feel as if they are in the wood with you. You’ve used some good vocabulary in your writing.
    Well done!
    Mrs Stones
    http://bradfordschools.net/blog/miriamlord100wc/

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